User blog comment:Cdc1998/A New Face at Bullworth: Part 5/@comment-26358727-20150709010425/@comment-26358727-20150717200555

It's a very effective way to write because it really helps people to draw connections between real life and fiction. It really helps people to relate to the people and the circumstances, which is the best way to really reach your readers with what you write. And you happen to do it very well! ( :

I think you should never limit yourself; let the story tell itself. If it needs 10 chapters, so be it. If it needs 15 chapters, so be it. Let the story tell itself fully and completely without limiting yourself to numbers. Just write until you feel you've conveyed the message you want to convey, or told the story you want to tell with it. That's my best advice for how long or short a piece should be.

Well, for what it's worth, I really like both lines and I think they both serve their purpose well. However, I think the final line you've got in there right now is a little bit more conclusive than the line before it - the line before it is a good lead-in to what Edgar is feeling, so the last line really solidifies it. You leave the reader wondering what's going to come of Charlie - and more importantly, his relationship with his best friends. Don't apologize for the emotional impact of the ending; it's effective! It works very well to express the loneliness Edgar must be feeling in that moment.

There are plenty of people out there who mean well, but end up in a bad situation sometimes. And they certainly aren't bad people, as easy as it can be to see them as such... I think it will be great to see Edgar go through some development in learning about who Charlie really is. Of course, I think we as the reader also really want to know... haha! It's a good revelation tactic, so I look forward to it!

You've handled the content very, very well thus far, so I don't think you'll have to worry about that in future chapters! Just keep giving it your best - you're doing great! ( :