Board Thread:Bully Fanon Writing Club/@comment-4833053-20151119031731/@comment-4833053-20151120014906

First off, thanks for taking the time to give me some feedback on this. I greatly appreciate it.

Going back and reading my chapters, you're right. I really haven't developed Edgar that much, and that's not good. I really do need to work on developing him.

I actually plan on the story to be longer than 10 chapters, it's just now I really don't know what to do. What I had planned for chapter 10 would involve basically a rebuilding of friendship between Charles and Bradi, but you're both definitely right on that I need to flesh Edgar out. I saw that you both replied to this earlier, it's just that I was busy with school that I didn't have time to reply.

I do have an idea for a chapter or two to focus entierely on Edgar's interractions with the other students aside from his circle of friends(for example, helping a girl who's being harrased by some of his fellow preps is something I thought of, although I really don't know if that's good or not). While I do want to flesh Edgar out, I'm afraid that if I were to put those events for chapter 10 instead of my original idea, it would interrupt the flow and continuity of the story, and would have you all wondering, "Wait, what the hell just happened, how did we end up here?"

Do you all have any suggestions or advice on what I should do for it, as well as a better way to help flesh Edgar out if hat idea isn't that great or could be better?. I'd greatly appreciate it.