User blog comment:TheToughGuy/Transferred To Bullworth (TheToughGuy): Chapter 24/@comment-4059927-20180614234038

I really like how you integrate your characters, and even the world they reside in at large. Honestly it’s a little weird for me to read a story following a completely different cast of characters as they go through Bullworth but it isn’t necessarily a bad thing. One issue I’ve noticed is some run on sentences and quite a few fragments that are littering it but it doesn’t detract from it and I didn’t notice them until a second reading of this chapter.