User blog comment:SirLinkalot96/The Greg Ryder Saga: Part 5: Chapter 13: A Strained Friendship/@comment-4059927-20130719002555

I'd say check your dialogue a bit closer. You're forgetting quotation marks when some characters no biggie. Also 'I yelled in a rage' I can tell that Greg is in a huge rage. We could tell just from what he said before that he was in a rage too, that statement was obvious.