User blog comment:Cdc1998/A New Face at Bullworth: Part 3/@comment-2173402-20150622213047/@comment-4833053-20150623071132

Hey, Soda. Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.

I do have a tendency to write when I clearly need to make another paragraph, it's kinda a bad habit of mine that I really don't pay attention to until I go back and read over. The same goes for my repetition of words. Since I was writing this from 3-5 AM yesterday morning that really doesn't help either. (but you can thank my erratic sleep schedule for that) From now on I'll be sure to space out my paragraphs more and add more variety for words.

The reason was because I felt that if I just mentioned the name, "Jimmy", people who read the story might think of Jimmy Hopkins instead of Michael's OC. Although, since I've never used Hopkins in the story do you think I should start referring Jimmy Queen just as Jimmy?

Thank you! I'm glad to hear you like it. It's definitely better than all of my original work I wrote when I started out writing on here. If this was a library, I would make sure to burn that section. My original OC, Charlie was very Marty Sue-ish, so when I got the idea for this story I decided to revamp him and make him more likable and relatable. Now I just got to figure out what direction I'm going to continue with the other characters. I do have stuff planned out for Edgar, but I'd like to develop the other character's interactions with him to both make it more lifelike and not to focus entirely on Charlie as a person Edgar thinks highly of. It's great to hear that you like the story, and I hope I don't disappoint as I continue it.