User blog comment:Cdc1998/A New Face at Bullworth/@comment-5385060-20151201140045

I'm not familiar with your other stories (I have a lot I need to get around to reading), this I found well written. You did great with the first three paragraphs. That told me everything I needed to know about his life before Bullworth, so I could into the rest of the chapter with a curious mind, seeking how he is going to start to be different. And you didn't disappoint.

I must admit at first, I thought he would want to change, but spend some time acting like a total douche with the preps. Edgar reaching out to Charles was a good surprise. That showed right away he isn't all talk. I do look forward to seeing how their friendship progresses.

I didn't see anything that needs to be improved on. Just a good strong start. Good job on that.