User blog comment:Cdc1998/A New Face at Bullworth: Part 9/@comment-26358727-20151111142928

Firstly, I'm so glad to see Charlie has sobered up a little in his time away. I know it's just silly kid stuff, being in high school and all, but I think it's a great symbol of maturity here - that he's finally figuring out who he is, or who he wants to be when high school is over.

I also want to mention I love your musical references. America's "Horse With No Name" is just brilliant - and oddly appropriate given its reference in the story.

The long and short of it, though, is that I'm just glad to see Charlie's come back. I know foolish and unnecessary spats can make or break a friendship and it would have been (while equally as likely) a heartbreaking story to see Charlie take off and never return. I think, despite the weight he puts on himself for not being enough, his friends need him just as much as he needs them.

It's a very refreshing approach to a friendship - and more recently, a coming-of-age - story that really rings true for a lot of people who have been or are in high school, I think.

The only part that I found that you could tweak is this line right here: "During my time gone, I traveled, a lot, Charlie begins to explain. You're just missing a quotation mark after "a lot", but otherwise it all looked good to me!  ( :

Awesome work!

Keep at it, man!