User blog comment:Memai/Why I cannot take your OC seriously./@comment-5283064-20120211232959/@comment-4675595-20120212012321

I'm pretty sure it's still illegal to give a gun to a minor, regardless of the reason - or to give a gun to anyone who doesn't have a liscence for it, which you can't get until you're at least 18 years old. An FBI agent, of all people, would not do something like this. He'd give it to C-Money's legal guardian, or someone who'd been close to his father while alive. I couldn't get through enough of the story to know about the whole kidnapping thing, so I won't comment on that for now.

Also, C-Money is a silly name. It'd work if he was some kind of comical character, like a parody of white suburban kids who try to act "hard." At first I thought he was a troll character, because of his name, and his unrealistic, over-the-top storyline.

But if you'd like some help, I'm considering making a blog post about revamping OCs to make them less Sue/Stue-ish and more well-rounded. Seems like the sorta thing that can do this community some good - would anyone be interested?