User blog comment:Memai/Why I cannot take your OC seriously./@comment-4059927-20120208044011

I agree with you, to a certain point at least. I think, honestly from my heart, that my character is terrible. Now I'm basing him off of how I grew up (Hell he's even got my name) but explaining him/me in such a way seems to catch me off guard. I could use some help from others. I know my problem. I don't know how to correct it alone. My problem isn't storytelling I know how the story will turn out. Might add some shit in between but yeah, nor is it grammar. It's character development and choice of words in dialogue. example: "'bla bla bla" he said." I'm not a master of fancy words and I will experiment with words because this is a learning experience for me.