Board Thread:Bully Fanon Writing Club/@comment-4995321-20151108143909/@comment-5385060-20151108151258

Just because her story is your favorite, doesn't mean the story should be immune from constructive criticism. Any writer hoping to improve their writing would want to know everything that isn't working in their story, to make it better. Constructive criticism is designed to point out what isn't working, and help make it work, but not in a way to tear down the writer's work or confidence.

I think with the story, Audrey comes across as bitter. How she is supposedly happy that someone else won, but she rants off on how she is so much prettier. This behavior also contradicts the fact that she isn't supposed to care about looks. Obviously she does. There seems to be hardly any development of the character, other than the fact that everyone thinks she is the most beautiful, but at the end doesn't. There is no defining moment there for Audrey.

Not with just Life as Bullworth's finest girl, writing wise, you are too in your comfort zone. The diary format is great and all, but to improve you need to start trying different styles of writing. If you are unsure what styles to go for, there are so many different examples of fanon on here in ways to go.

I think the main problem is, you're trying too hard to get other people to like it, or trying to go with other people's story genres hoping to get the same readership response, you are missing out on what is important. Writing is about having fun. Really enjoying following every plot idea, seeing your character grow and come to life. Then sharing it with others. If you are not having fun with it, your readers can tell.

So, that is my advice; focus more on her development, have fun with what you do, and try writing a few pieces out of your comfort zone.