User blog comment:Memai/Why I cannot take your OC seriously./@comment-3145713-20120208035640/@comment-3145713-20120208143902

Alright, I'm gonna speak up frankly:

Truth is, when I first came to this wiki, I was actually asking for critique if you can believe that. I got used to critiques as an art student, because oh boy do they tear you a new one if you're off the mark. But very few people actually pointed things out within my stories...you know, whether there are faults, or praising certain parts within it.

I don't want to attack anyone by saying this, but I have tried to critique several times before. Like in one of BBF's C-Money stories, he's talking about how supposedly some FBI agent came to the school and just gave C-Money a gun to track down his parents' killers. That's ridiculous by itself, but what really boggled my mind was how it was written. I mean, he just hands the gun to him! To a minor, just like that. I pointed this out to him. And then yeah, there's the fact that the story feels like a bread crumb trail.

Or, recently, in "The Band Comes to Bullworth" stories, Ted's way of talking has nothing to do with Ted in the game (the one in the game always uses terms like "Bro" or football slang (and slang in general).

But my few critiques fell on deaf ears, and the meltdown a few months ago didn't help either. And because nobody bothered critiquing my work, I just lost motivation to even remark on people's stories. The Bullworth Goths thing had a decent premise, but I didn't follow through to the molestation part, hence why I never noticed it.

This is my first time ever attempting fanfiction, so I don't expect my characters to be original. However, what I had in mind was to introduce a set of characters (though not right off the bat) that would compliment each other in a way rather than focus on one particular character throughout the entire story.

Unfortunately, I am not a witty person. But I do try my best to have the right words in dialogue depending on the character (Julia speaking in a sophisticated manner, Ren more similar to her forefather Ricky, etc.).

I also do feel I added unnecessary tidbits in some parts of my story so far (which I'm gonna revise), but at the same time, keep in mind I actually want to turn this into a game (as I'm majoring in Game Design). In visual form, a lot of the details wouldn't even need to be explained. It's happening quickly in front of our eyes, you know?

Anyways, that's my take.