User blog comment:Cdc1998/A New Face at Bullworth: Part 5/@comment-26358727-20150709010425/@comment-26358727-20150716163727

Hey, don't sweat it - you're brilliant at what you do, you know, and I think you're really nailing it!

I'm curious about where things will go with the short films, but you certainly don't need to rush that; the remainder of this chapter introduced an entirely new problem that needs to be dealt with and I think that's very important.

I think your characterizations are very human. I'm not familiar enough with the characters to judge their authenticity, but I do find their responses to their environment to be very real. From Charlie's heated explosion to Bradi's breakdown afterwards, it's very raw and leaves the reader wondering whose side they should be on.

Yeah, Bradi was being confrontational, but Charlie was even more so - and for a far longer period of time. They both have their reasons, and there's not always a 'right' or 'wrong' in these circumstances. I like your ability to keep that very balanced, without pushing the reader in favor of one over the other. I feel for everyone because everyone is in a bad place in that moment and it's impossible to know the right thing to do as a result. ) :

However, I think I feel the worst for Edgar - especially in that final line.

It leaves the chapter off with a very hollow feeling; it's lonely, really, and I think everyone has a friend similar to Charlie. Or has been in a position similar to Charlie's. In fact, it happens to hit home quite hard for me, so I think it really offered the emotional 'oomph' you were shooting for. ( ':