User blog comment:TheToughGuy/T.U.S.S. - Downfall: Part 1/@comment-1824274-20160211002327

FINALLY I've been anxiously waiting for some chapters based off of Clayton!

I really like the buildup to the apocolypse, showing how normal everything is and then how much everything will change later on. The only thing that bothered me that I would change if I were you (this is just my opinion) is that Clayton didn't seem too phased by witnessing a person get shot right in front of him. Also, a small town cop who I'm assuming probably never fired his gun in the line of duty would be just as freaked out as Clayton would be. I think if you show how much it affected them both, then I think it would be more impactful on the reader. As far as I know, Clayton hasn't killed anyone in his life (at least not yet anyway) or witnessed someone get killed. I know if I saw someone get their brains blown out in front of me, regardless if they were attacking me or not, I'd be VERY distraught and freaked out. I think you should show how much that shook Clayton up emotionally and psychologically.

Oh, and this is just me being a grammar Nazi, but the sentence "They are a figment of Hollywood's crazy ass opinion" I think the word you're looking for is "imagination".

Other than that, a great start to a mini-series and I can't wait for the next chapter!