Thread:SodaCat/@comment-26570972-20180519002552/@comment-34814-20180519073803

(Language warning for those who are sensitive about such things)

You had these lists of heinous deeds that your bad guy characters had done, and you kept putting stuff like

"Coby called some Prep a Faggot once."

Now, I know that 'faggot' is considered a much worse word nowadays than it was back when I was in high school, but seriously? Him calling everybody a faggot all the time is a more realistic way a bully would actually act.

Your characters honestly read like someone who had only read descriptions of bullying trying to make the vilest characters ever.

Then there's stuff like teachers who smash phones and keep guns in their desk. That's illegal.

And OF COURSE all of your bully characters are tougher than Jimmy and Russell. (This is a basic pet peeve of mine. No character should ever be tougher than Jimmy Hopkins.  Period.)

You want help making good characters and there's a lot of people around here who'd be happy to help. But a character who isn't so much a character as a list of horrible things said character has done and how they get away with everything all the time isn't going to fly here.