Thread:SodaCat/@comment-5385060-20151024102655/@comment-5385060-20151025033404

First Jesse, I'll need you to suggest some dialogue. The first voice is Ted. I'd like the second voice (listening to it) to be Jesse. For the sake of this, I did generic jock responses, in case he couldn't be in my story. I already shared this with TTG, the ghost girl is Susie "Blade" Chase from his Greenwood C-Money story. The dialogue to change is underlined. I'd like the sentiment to be the same, but in Jesse's words.

I approached the door, pressing my ear to it, trying to listen in on the conversation within. "This chick walked amoung the kids of the camp. Slept in one of the cabins. Snuck out and stole stuff to trade. All seemed normal, except she was as cold as death." "So what. Bro, that story sucks."

"Oh, yeah? At the end of the summer she took some reckless kid to a mine shaft. There hidden in a chamber was her lifeless body, and the chick had gone. Never to be seen again." "Woah.. shit, how do you know that?"

"My cousin told me."